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2014-10-12 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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Hello again :) This is a 'real' homework! Because I wrote so many sentences about another topic before, there was no space to write that I used almost space given to me..haha Anyway, this topic is "Do you think stress is ever good, useful, or necessary? Why or why not?" I think stress is harmful. Of course the proper stress can be good, useful and necessary. But not to me :( Actually I am a person who have weakness to sleep. You know? I am greedy. I want to use all time given to me and I have really many things to want to do. But I have a physically weak body so I have to sleep enough. And time is limited. I try to maintain balance between them but often I'm failed. I always have stress that I sleep so much. The stress is not good to me. Because it makes me exhausted so I slept much again. It's like the Mobius strip :( Except it, I'm a very positive person. I have tried to have a positive thought about it also. If I know myself more, It might be possible to maintain balance.

강사 첨삭

Hi there again!
Wow! It\'s nice to hear that you try to think positive.
That\'s a great attitude. I am proud of you.
Whenever you are stressed, take a deep breath and think about good things.
Always find something that will motivate you more.
Don\'t worry, I am here to cheer you up. 
Talk to you soon. Take enough rest this weekend.
Teacher Nina

Hello again :)
>> Correct
This is a \'real\' homework!
>> This is my real homework. 
Because I wrote so many sentences about another topic before, there was no space to write that I used almost space given to me..haha
>> Because I wrote so many sentences about another topic before, there was no space to write, I used almost space given to me.

Anyway, this topic is \"Do you think stress is ever good, useful, or necessary? Why or why not?\"
>> Correct
I think stress is harmful.
>> Correct
Of course the proper stress can be good, useful and necessary. But not to me :(
>> Of course moderate stress can be good, useful and necessary. But not to me :(

Actually I am a person who have weakness to sleep.
>> Actually, I am a person who have weakness in sleeping.
>> OR: Actually, I am a person who loves sleeping. 
You know? I am greedy.
>> Correct
I want to use all time given to me and I have really many things to want to do.
>> I want to use all the time given to me and I have really many things that I want to do.
But I have a physically weak body so I have to sleep enough.
>> But I am physically weak so I need to have enough sleep.
>> OR: But I have a weak body so I need to have enough sleep.
And time is limited.
>> And the time is limited. 
I try to maintain balance between them but often I\'m failed.
>> I try to maintain balance between them but often fail.
I always have stress that I sleep so much.
>> I am always stressed so I sleep a lot. 
The stress is not good to me.
>> Stress is not good to me. 
Because it makes me exhausted so I slept much again.
>> Because it makes me exhausted so I need to sleep/ 
It\'s like the Mobius strip :(
>> Correct
Except it, I\'m a very positive person.
>> However, I am a very positive person. 
I have tried to have a positive thought about it also.
>> I also try to have a positive mind. 
>> OR: I also try to think positive. 
If I know myself more, It might be possible to maintain balance.
>> Correct
>> OR: If I know myself more, it might be possible to make a balance. 

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