homework
학생이 쓴 원문
I disagree the following statement.
Because it will be able to control by minority pepole.
This mean is someone who has rich or has a power.
And they pay the money cause they command the some pepole make statement.
The many pepole see the new and see the satrement of richman made it,That will be brainwashing
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! ^^
Thank you for your opinion about the composition topic. ^^ Speaking of, in every essay, always mention the composition topic in the first sentence so anyone who is reading the composition would know what you are writing about. The rest of the corrections made were to make your sentences more legible and comprehensive. ^^
All in all, you did good. ^^ Keep up the good work. ^^
All good things,
==Teacher Charlie==
>> I disagree with the following statement that television, newspapers, magazines, and other media pay too much attention to the personal lives of famous people such as public figures and celebrities.
Because it will be able to control by minority pepole.
Because it will be able to control by minority pepole.
>> I disagree because media is used to control the public.
This mean is someone who has rich or has a power. And they pay the money cause they command the some pepole make statement.
This mean is someone who has rich or has a power. And they pay the money cause they command the some pepole make statement.
>> I mean that someone who is rich or has power is able to pay or command the media to publish false statements.
The many pepole see the new and see the satrement of richman made it,That will be brainwashing
>> When this happens, people will get brainwashed because they will see the false statements made by the rich people in the television, newspapers, magazines and other forms of media.
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