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2014-10-20 · 첨삭 강사 Kris

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My advantage is positive thinking. I always try to have positive thinking. I think everyone needs positive thinking. These days, we can see a lot of bad news through TV news. It happen because of negative thinking. Also, we meet many people through SNS. I think that it is dangerous because personal information can open to the public.

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Hi [이름]! Happy Monday! ^^ How are you? Thank you so much for making your homework. Social networking can be of help and can be of a danger to us. So, we have to be careful on what we post about ourselves and about others. These days, the government is implementing a law regarding the proper use of social networking but most of the people are criticizing it. Anyway, just don\'t expose yourself too much on social networking. Take care! ^^ See you.   ~~Teacher Kris   My advantage is positive thinking. >>My objective is positive thinking.I always try to have positive thinking. >> I always  have positive thinking.I think everyone needs positive thinking. >> Correct >> OR: I think everyone should have a positive thinking.These days, we can see a lot of bad news through TV news. >> CorrectIt happen because of negative thinking. >> Crime happens because people think negatively.Also, we meet many people through SNS. >> CorrectI think that it is dangerous because personal information can open to the public. >> I think, it is dangerous because our personal information can be opened to the public.

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