Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
My advantage is positive thinking.
I always try to have positive thinking.
I think everyone needs positive thinking.
These days, we can see a lot of bad news through TV news.
It happen because of negative thinking.
Also, we meet many people through SNS.
I think that it is dangerous because personal information can open to the public.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]!
Happy Monday! ^^
How are you? Thank you so much for making your
homework. Social networking can be of help and can be of
a danger to us. So, we have to be careful on what we post about ourselves
and about others. These days, the government is implementing a law regarding
the proper use of social networking but most of the people are criticizing it.
Anyway, just don\'t expose yourself too much on social networking.
Take care! ^^
See you.
~~Teacher Kris
My advantage is positive thinking.
>>My objective is positive thinking.I always try to have positive thinking.
>> I always have positive thinking.I think everyone needs positive thinking.
>> Correct
>> OR: I think everyone should have a positive thinking.These days, we can see a lot of bad news through TV news.
>> CorrectIt happen because of negative thinking.
>> Crime happens because people think negatively.Also, we meet many people through SNS.
>> CorrectI think that it is dangerous because personal information can open to the public.
>> I think, it is dangerous because our personal information can be opened to the public.
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