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2014-10-21 · 첨삭 강사 Paula

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Paula! Good afternoon. I think that our last class was very good, and I am thankful that you gave me such a good lesson. Your encouragement always helps me improve my English level. I am looking forward to talking to you fluently in English. ^^ See you! [이름] *ESSAY I also think that dangerous sports or activities often fascinate me. I like doing wall climbing and bungee jumping. In my case, I can feel extreme happiness through these activities. When I reach the top of the wall doing climbing, I can feel a sense of accomplishment. Regarding the bungee jumping, I didn’t experience yet. If I have a change to do that, I am sure I won’t hesitate to jump. Before that, we all should check our safety device in advance.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! ^.^

Happy Tuesday! ^^

 

Thank you for the complement about our class yesterday!

I am really glad that somehow you had fun in our class.

I would like to say THANK YOU TOO for being a cooperative and patient student!

Don\'t worry!

I will always do my best to help you improve in English.

I know that you will speak in English fluently very soon.

 

Anyway, please see the corrections and suggestions below! ^^

See you! ^^,

 

... Teacher Paula ... ^.~

 

 

Paula!

>> CORRECT!

>> OR: Hi Paula!

>> OR: Hello Paula!
Good afternoon.
>> CORRECT!

>> OR: Good afternoon!

I think that our last class was very good, and I am thankful that you gave me such a good lesson.
>> CORRECT!

Your encouragement always helps me improve my English level.
>> CORRECT!

I am looking forward to talking to you fluently in English. ^^
>> CORRECT!

See you!
>> CORRECT!

[이름]
>> CORRECT!


*ESSAY

I also think that dangerous sports or activities often fascinate me.
>> CORRECT!

I like doing wall climbing and bungee jumping.
>> CORRECT!

>> OR: I like doing some dangerous activities like wall climbing and bungee jumping.

In my case, I can feel extreme happiness through these activities.
>> CORRECT!

When I reach the top of the wall doing climbing, I can feel a sense of accomplishment.
>> CORRECT!

Regarding the bungee jumping, I didn’t experience yet.
>> Regarding bungee jumping, I haven\'t experienced it yet.

>> OR: Regarding bungee jumping, I didn\'t experience it yet.

If I have a change to do that, I am sure I won’t hesitate to jump.
>> If I have a chance to do that, I am sure I won\'t hesitate to jump.

>> OR: If I have a chance to do that, I am sure I won\'t hesitate to do it.

Before that, we all should check our safety device in advance.

>> Before that, we all should check our safety devices in advance.

>> OR: Before that, we have to check our safety gears in advance.

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