homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Dear [Name]. [Name] morning.
Thank you for modifying my composition every day.
But I’d like to know what part of my composition was wrong.
The best thing is that you help me comment in details with parenthesis.
Is it possible? ^^;;
Thank you for your help all the time. ^^
See you!
*ESSAY
Firstly, to be a good son or daughter they should study hard at their school days.
Most of parents want their children to become a great man, and they think the best way to become a great man is studying.
Secondly, they should have a good mind and body.
Our parents hope we grow up painlessly all the time.
Our mind and body which parents gave us are the best precious asset.
We should treasure that.
Finally, we should show our parents that we are spending our happy days and we are thinking that we are thankful to them all the time.
Naturally, our parents are willing to love us all there life whether we are good to them or not.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! ^.^
Happy Friday! ^^
Thank you for acknowledging my effort to help you learn and study English! ^^
Frankly speaking, I am happy that you freely express your ideas and concerns.
Just be free to give some clarifications.
By the way, I already discussed what you need to know about your composition below.
All you need to do is to check them thoroughly.
Enjoy improving your writing skill.
Anyway, see you later! ^^
Have a great day ahead! ^^
... Teacher Paula ... ^.~
Dear [Name]. [Name]
*ESSAY
>> Dear [Name]. [Name],
Good morning.
>> CORRECT!
>> CORRECT!
>> OR: Good morning!
Thank you for modifying my composition every day.
>> CORRECT!
But I’d like to know what part of my composition was wrong.
>> However, I would like to know what part of my composition now is wrong. (In writing, you should use \"however\" not \"but\".)
>> However, I would like to know what part of my composition now is wrong. (In writing, you should use \"however\" not \"but\".)
The best thing is that you help me comment in details with parenthesis.
>> The best thing is that you help me with your comments in details with parenthesis. (To make your sentence complete, use prepositions if needed.)
>> The best thing is that you help me with your comments in details with parenthesis. (To make your sentence complete, use prepositions if needed.)
Is it possible? ^^;;
>> CORRECT!
>> CORRECT!
Thank you for your help all the time. ^^
>> CORRECT!
>> CORRECT!
>> OR: Thank you for your help all the time!
See you!
>> CORRECT!
>> CORRECT!
*ESSAY
Firstly, to be a good son or daughter they should study hard at their school days.
>> Firstly, to be a good son and daughter, they should study hard in their school days. (\"At school days\" is wrong. It should be \"in school days.\")
>> Firstly, to be a good son and daughter, they should study hard in their school days. (\"At school days\" is wrong. It should be \"in school days.\")
Most of parents want their children to become a great man, and they think the best way to become a great man is studying.
>> Most parents want their children to become great people, and they think the best way to be a great person is studying. (\"Most parents\" is used as a general thought, but \"most of the\" is used as a specific idea.)
>> Most parents want their children to become great people, and they think the best way to be a great person is studying. (\"Most parents\" is used as a general thought, but \"most of the\" is used as a specific idea.)
Secondly, they should have a good mind and body.
>> CORRECT!
>> CORRECT!
>> OR: Secondly, they should be healthy mentally and physically.
>> OR: Secondly, they should have mental and physical health.
Our parents hope we grow up painlessly all the time.
>> CORRECT!
>> CORRECT!
Our mind and body which parents gave us are the best precious asset.
>> Our minds and bodies which our parents gave us are the best precious assets. (If your sentences has a plural form, make all nouns plural.)
>> Our minds and bodies which our parents gave us are the best precious assets. (If your sentences has a plural form, make all nouns plural.)
We should treasure that.
>> CORRECT!
Finally, we should show our parents that we are spending our happy days and we are thinking that we are thankful to them all the time.
>> Finally, we should show our parents that we are spending our happy days, and we should be thankful to them all the time. (We should not think of thanking our parents. It should be a natural feeling.)
Naturally, our parents are willing to love us all there life whether we are good to them or not.
>> CORRECT!
Finally, we should show our parents that we are spending our happy days and we are thinking that we are thankful to them all the time.
>> Finally, we should show our parents that we are spending our happy days, and we should be thankful to them all the time. (We should not think of thanking our parents. It should be a natural feeling.)
Naturally, our parents are willing to love us all there life whether we are good to them or not.
>> Naturally, our parents are willing to love us all their lives whether we are good to them or not. (Use \"their\" not \"there\". \"Their\" is a possessive adjective. \"There\" is an adverb and exclamation. In addition, \"life\" should be \"lives\".)
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