Homework!

2014-10-25 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

학생이 쓴 원문

Hello teacher Nina! I write a composition for a long time. I plan to do my homeworks this weekend and hope that I finish all of them :) Oh, first of all, I want to tell you that I'm sorry because I didn't answer your call few times. (I couldn't tell you it in our class.) I think I didn't say it formally. And I'm appriciated that you greeted me even you didn't know my situation because I didn't explain you using any ways. I really missed our class and your laughter. Anyway, The topic you gave me is "Do you think it is possible for a cold hearted person to change?" In Korea, people usaully say "People don't change easily." I somewhat agree. But at the same time, people have been being grown up everytime. I believe that people can change. There is no something unchangeable to people. Even a person has a really cold heart, it is never said that the person change himself/herself. So my opinion is that a cold hearted person can be changed.

강사 첨삭

Hi there [이름]!
Happy day to you!

Oh my god! I was a bit teary-eyed after reading your composition.

Thank you because you appreciate our class and my efforts.

I will always be here no matter what.

I am glad that you did your homework.

You made me happy today. Have a nice day.

Take Care!
Teacher Nina

Hello teacher Nina!

>> correct!
I write a composition for a long time.

>> I didn\'t write a composition for a long time.
I plan to do my homeworks this weekend and hope that I finish all of them :)

>> I planned to do all of my homework this weekend and hope that I can finish all of them.

Oh, first of all, I want to tell you that I\'m sorry because I didn\'t answer your call few times. (I couldn\'t tell you it in our class.)

>> Oh, first of all, I want to tell you that I\'m sorry because I didn\'t answer your call for a few times. (I wasn\'t able to tell it in our class.)

>> OR: First of all, I want to apologize because I didn\'t answer your call for a few days. (I wasn\'t able to tell it in our class.)
I think I didn\'t say it formally.

>> correct!

>> OR: I think I didn\'t say it in a formal way.

And I\'m appriciated that you greeted me even you didn\'t know my situation because I didn\'t explain you using any ways.

>> And I appreciate that you greeted me even if you didn\'t know my situation, because I didn\'t explain it to you in any way.

>> OR: I appreciate that you greeted me even if you were not informed about my situation, because I didn\'t tell you in any way.
I really missed our class and your laughter.

>> correct!

Anyway, The topic you gave me is \"Do you think it is possible for a cold hearted person to change?\"

>> Anyway, the topic you gave me was \"Do you think it is possible for a cold hearted person to change?\"

In Korea, people usaully say \"People don\'t change easily.\"

>> correct! ( spelling check: usually ^^)
I somewhat agree.

>> correct!

>> OR: I somewhat agree with it.

But at the same time, people have been being grown up everytime.

>> But at the same time, people have been growing every time.

>> OR: But at the same time, people have been changing.
I believe that people can change.

>> correct!
There is no something unchangeable to people.

>> There is nothing that people can\'t change.
Even a person has a really cold heart, it is never said that the person change himself/herself.

>> Even a person has a really cold heart. it is never said that the person can\'t change himself/herself.
So my opinion is that a cold hearted person can be changed.

>> So, I think that a cold hearted person can change.

>> OR: In my opinion, a cold hearted person can change.

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