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This topic is "What factors may result in the breakdown of a good friendship?"
I think that in any relationships trust is most important.
When you think a person in some relation with you doesn't trust you or the person think that you don't trust him/her, the breakdown of the relationship begun whatever the relationship is, I think.
(Of course, expectation and trust have to be divided.)
And the second one that I think is egoism.
Not to do consideration for a person makes the breakdown begin.
I always pay attention not to betray someone's trust and not to do egoism.
If the breakdown begins once, it is really hard to restore the relation.
And as time goes by, it is more harder.
So we have to pay attention not to make a mistake that we betray someone's trust and we think only ourselves.
If we make the mistake, we have to try to correct ourselves and the situation.
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Thanks for this wonderful essay, [이름]!
You are right, we should be careful with our actions/ words towards others.
Always be thankful if the person believes in you.
We shouldn\'t be a self-centered person when we are in a relationship.
We should be sensitive enough when dealing with other people.
Have a marvelous time today.
Teacher Nina
>> correct
This is already a third homework that I do today!
This is already a third homework that I do today!
>> This is already my third homework.
>> OR: This is already the third homework that I did today.
This topic is \"What factors may result in the breakdown of a good friendship?\"
I think that in any relationships trust is most important.
>> OR: This is already the third homework that I did today.
This topic is \"What factors may result in the breakdown of a good friendship?\"
I think that in any relationships trust is most important.
>> First, I think that in any relationship, trust is the most important factor.
>> OR: Firstly, I think that in any relationship, trust is really vital.
When you think a person in some relation with you doesn\'t trust you or the person think that you don\'t trust him/her, the breakdown of the relationship begun whatever the relationship is, I think.
When you think a person in some relation with you doesn\'t trust you or the person think that you don\'t trust him/her, the breakdown of the relationship begun whatever the relationship is, I think.
>> Did you mean: In my opinion, if a person in a relationship doesn\'t trust you or that person think that you don\'t trust him/her, there will be a problem.
>> OR: In my opinion, if a person who is in a relationship doesn\'t trust you or that person think that you don\'t trust him/her, the relationship will be easily destroyed.
(Of course, expectation and trust have to be divided.)
(Of course, expectation and trust have to be divided.)
>> correct
>> Better: Of course, expectations and trust should be managed.
And the second one that I think is egoism.
And the second one that I think is egoism.
>> Secondly, I think it is Egoism.
Not to do consideration for a person makes the breakdown begin.
Not to do consideration for a person makes the breakdown begin.
>> Not being considerate of the other person will lead to a problem.
>> OR: Not being considerate of your partner, problems will occur.
I always pay attention not to betray someone\'s trust and not to do egoism.
I always pay attention not to betray someone\'s trust and not to do egoism.
>> I always pay attention not to betray someone\'s trust and not to be Egoistic.
>> OR: I always make sure not to destroy someone\'s trust and not to be Egoistic.
If the breakdown begins once, it is really hard to restore the relation.
If the breakdown begins once, it is really hard to restore the relation.
>> If the relationship was broken once, it is really hard to restore it again.
>> Better: If the relationship was once destroyed because of some instances, it is difficult to fix it again.
And as time goes by, it is more harder.
And as time goes by, it is more harder.
>> And as time goes by, it becomes harder.
>> OR: And as time passes by, the difficulty increases.
So we have to pay attention not to make a mistake that we betray someone\'s trust and we think only ourselves.
>> OR: And as time passes by, the difficulty increases.
So we have to pay attention not to make a mistake that we betray someone\'s trust and we think only ourselves.
>> So, we have to pay attention not to make a mistake that we betray someone\'s trust and think only of ourselves.
>> OR: So, we have to pay attention not to destroy someone\'s trust and think only of ourselves.
If we make the mistake, we have to try to correct ourselves and the situation.
If we make the mistake, we have to try to correct ourselves and the situation.
>> If we make a mistake, we have to try to correct it by ourselves and the situation.
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