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2014-10-27 · 첨삭 강사 Paula

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*ESSAY: Some people prefer to work for a large company. Others prefer to work for a small company. Which would you prefer? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice. I am now working at a small company. I have never worked at a large company, so it is hard to say which I prefer. However I am satisfied with my current company life, and I don’t want to move to another company, even if that is a larger one. I think all people have their primary reason when they choose the company. I guess the most important thing is how you are satisfied with your current job.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! ^.^

Happy Monday! ^^

 

Very well said! ^^

You made things really direct to the point.

Very good! ^^

If I grade your composition, it will be 7 out of 10.

This is a good score for a written work.

 

By the way, please check the corrections and suggestions below! ^^

 

Anyway, see you very soon! ^^

 

... Teacher Paula ... ^.~

 

 

I am now working at a small company.
>> CORRECT!

>> OR: I am now working for a small company.

I have never worked at a large company, so it is hard to say which I prefer.
>> CORRECT!

>> OR: I have never worked for a large company, so it is hard to say which I prefer.

However I am satisfied with my current company life, and I don’t want to move to another company, even if that is a larger one.
>> However, I am satisfied with my current company life, and I don\'t want to move to another workplace, even if that is a larger one. (How do you type your punctuation marks for shorten words like don\'t. It appears different on my page. Anyway, you need to avoid redundancy or repetition of words.)

I think all people have their primary reason when they choose the company.
>> I think all people have their primary reasons when they choose the company where they work. (We don\'t have the same reasons, so the word reason should be in plural form.)

I guess the most important thing is how you are satisfied with your current job.

>> CORRECT!

>> OR: I guess the most important reason is your satisfaction in your current job.

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