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2014-10-29 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

학생이 쓴 원문

Hi Erine Nice to meet you. I hope that studying English with you makes you & me happy and upgrades my English skill. Plz drag my potential ability out ^^ -----homework---- Volunteerism is itself not bad. But It's good point is getting spoiling. Some students took part in community service to use way to go better school. They might not realize the real meaning. We have to teach young generation why we help others and give help without any qualification. And government does not give benefit having volunteering students for enterance into a school. A pure community service is not utilized any device to abtain someone's profit.

강사 첨삭

Hello there, [이름]!^^

Thank you for doing your homework. This will serve as your diary as well.

It is a way for you to improve your sentence construction and I will be guiding your

while you are enhancing your skill.

Anyhow, it is also a nice thing that you became my student.^^

I am honored to teach and have fun with you in our class.

See you then!^^

~~Teacher Erine~~

Hi Erine

>> Hi, Erine.
Nice to meet you.

>> Correct.

I hope that studying English with you makes you & me happy and upgrades my English skill.

>> Correct.

Plz drag my potential ability out ^^
>> Correct. (But next time, make the word \"please\" complete.^.^)
-----homework----
Volunteerism is itself not bad.

>> Volunteerism/Voluntarism itself is not bad.

But It\'s good point is getting spoiling.

>> It\'s good point is getting spoiling. (But wait, I think the sentence is quite contradicting. Do you mean: It\'s bad point is to spoil people.?)
Some students took part in community service to use way to go better school.

>> Some students take part in a community service as a way to go to a better school.
They might not realize the real meaning.

>> Correct.

We have to teach young generation why we help others and give help without any qualification.

>> We have to teach younger generation the reason why we help others and give help without any qualification/reward in return.

And government does not give benefit having volunteering students for enterance into a school.

>> And that the government does not give benefits to volunteer students to enter a school.

A pure community service is not utilized any device to abtain someone\'s profit.

>> A pure community service is not utilized in any way to obtain someone\'s profit.

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