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Is installation of CCTV camera sufficient to protect your proporties?
The installation of CCTV camera is not sufficient to protect our proporties. Eventhough there is CCTV camera, it is not sufficient to protect our proporties. There is some place that CCTV camera cannot record. So, the theif can go into house and get my proporties without showing his face on camera. When CCTV camera didn't take the theif face, it will be very hard to catch him after he runaway. It is also too expensive to look the camera every minute. So it is not worth to install camera at all. I think CCTV is ineffiecient, you'd better use safety lock.
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Is installation of CCTV camera sufficient to protect your proporties?The installation of CCTV camera is not sufficient to protect our proporties.
>>The installation of CCTV camera is not sufficient to protect our properties.
Eventhough there is CCTV camera, it is not sufficient to protect our proporties.
>> Eventhough there is CCTV camera, it is not sufficient to protect our properties.
There is some place that CCTV camera cannot record.
>> A CCTV camera cannot capture a video in all areas in my house.
So, the theif can go into house and get my proporties without showing his face on camera.
>> So, a thief can go into my house and get my properties without showing his face on camera.
When CCTV camera didn\'t take the theif face, it will be very hard to catch him after he runaway.
>> If that happens, it will be hard to catch him after he runaway.
It is also too expensive to look the camera every minute.
>> It is also very expensive to install CCTV camera system.
So it is not worth to install camera at all.
>> So it is not worth it to install CCTC camera.
I think CCTV is ineffiecient, you\'d better use safety lock.
>> I think CCTV is inefficient, you\'d better use a safety lock.
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