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I am so happy that you always do your best in our class and also in this...
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Juvenile delinquency should be taken care of with various viewpoints.
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At the societal aspect, it is important to provide with the young the facilities for prompting their various activities.
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The major source for their misbehavior is their indiscriminate aggressiveness toward others.
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By doing so, hence, they can be given some chances to reduce their aggressive characteristic and divert it into more positive one.
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Apart from it, the activities can help them set more productive future goals because they have a lot of possibilities to satisfy their multidimensional interest, for example, they can quench their intellectual and physical desires at the same time.
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In terms of the familial level, it is necessary to make more conversation between parents and their children.
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This kind of interaction can bring forth a great deal of affection and mutual care between them, which are conducive to control their children’s delinquency more effectively.
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On the other hand, the trust and faith originated from the interaction can provide with the parents more opportunities to spend more time with their children.
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Thanks to it, the children would feel that they are cared, which can lower the probability of their behaving badly.
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