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2014-11-03 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

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Hi Erine^^My baby has hand-foot-and-mouth disease. It can contaminate others. He could stay at home with me. he did not go care center. I worried about my English class. But I miss the opportunity to delay the class. I can't help pushing class. I am sorry for that. And Thank you for your solicitous action. ----------------------- Quiking a smoke is very hard to stop bad habit at the first attempt. If you learn to smoke at first time, that means already you are captured by the devil. That is a sort of addiction. Smoking is very slowly consistently to give harm your body, emotion and financial health.Anyway, To stop a smoking needs step by step. First, You can reduce the number of tobacco. Second, you can need to patch helping control the nicotine. And last and mort important method is having a stong will that quicks a smoke and keeps a your body and mind. These kinds of endeavor make success to break a specific habit of smoking.

강사 첨삭

Hi there!

Thank you for your composition. It is always nice to create your own composition so that you will be able to practice the things you learned.

Take note that most of the corrections have something to do with capitalizations.

I\'m sorry about the state of your baby. I hope your baby gets well soon. ^^

~~T. Erine~~

Hi Erine^^My baby has hand-foot-and-mouth disease.

>> Correct.

It can contaminate others.

>> Correct.

He could stay at home with me.

>> Correct.

he did not go care center.

>> He did not go to the center.

I worried about my English class. But I miss the opportunity to delay the class.

>> I\'m worried about my English class because I missed the opportunity to delay it.

I can\'t help pushing class.

>> I can\'t help delaying my class.

I am sorry for that. And Thank you for your solicitous action.

>> I\'m sorry for that and thank you for your solicitous action.
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Quiking a smoke is very hard to stop bad habit at the first attempt.

>> Smoking is a bad habit that is very hard to stop at first attempt.
If you learn to smoke at first time, that means already you are captured by the devil.

>> If you learn to smoke for the first time, that already means that you are captured by the devil.

That is a sort of addiction.

>> Correct.
Smoking is very slowly consistently to give harm your body, emotion and financial health.

>> Smoking very slowly harms your body, emotions and financial health.

Anyway, To stop a smoking needs step by step.

>> Anyway, to stop smoking we need to do it step by step.
First, You can reduce the number of tobacco.
>> Correct.

Second, you can need to patch helping control the nicotine.

>> Second, you need to use patches to help control the nicotine in your body.
And last and mort important method is having a stong will that quicks a smoke and keeps a your body and mind.
>> Last and the most important method is having a strong will to quit smoking and keep your mind and body healthy.

These kinds of endeavor make success to break a specific habit of smoking.

>> These kinds of endeavor will make you successful in breaking a specific habit of smoking.

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