Homework!
학생이 쓴 원문
I agree with this statement. When I was young, I thouhgt it's wise to choice the right job to be joyful. But, it's been changed. Now, I think to earn appropriate money is important to keep my life joyful. If finantial condition isn't good, I cannot enjoy my job, and that makes me hard to bear.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! ^.^
Happy Tuesday! ^^
First of all, I would like to say sorry for my late reply.
Anyway, until now, I am still confused about the meaning of a right job.
How do you say that you have the right job for you?
By the way, for your composition, I give you 7 out of 10.
You made a good composition, but there are some points you need to consider.
First, you need to be sure with the spelling of the words you use.
Then, check the structure of your sentences.
Be sure that you use correct grammar.
Finally, I think you need to proofread your composition after you make it.
In this way, you will have ideas on how to improve your writing.
That\'s all for now! ^^
See you soon! ^.^
... Teacher Paula ... ^.~
>> CORRECT!
When I was young, I thouhgt it\'s wise to choice the right job to be joyful.
>> When I was young, I thought it\'s wise to choose the right job to be joyful. (SPELLING > THOUHGT should be THOUGHT. CORRECT FORM OF WORD > CHOICE should be CHOOSE.)
But, it\'s been changed.
>> However, It\'s been changed. (BUT in the beginning of a sentence is used in SPEAKING. You should use HOWEVER.)
Now, I think to earn appropriate money is important to keep my life joyful.
>> CORRECT!
If finantial condition isn\'t good, I cannot enjoy my job, and that makes me hard to bear.
>> If financial condition isn\'t good, I cannot enjoy my job, and that makes it hard for me to bear. (SPELLING: FINANTIAL should be FINANCIAL. REMEMBER THIS PATTERN > makes something hard to bear.)
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