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2014-11-11 · 첨삭 강사 Charlie

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If you fight your best friends and he got a mad. He order to you that 'Pleas don't call me, I don't want a see you!!" And when you reseach the honme, you can think your wrong. So you decide the apologize to him. In this case, we can have a two solution. First, you should wirte a letter for him. You can apologize seriously. But you can made him to more angry. And it will be doubt the truth of your letter. Second, you should say You can convey your mind directly. But he shouldn't meet you before you want to met him. Threfore My opinion is 'I disagree the Face-to-face communication is better than other types of communication, such as letters, email, or telephone calls.'

강사 첨삭

Hi there [이름]! ^^ Thank you for your opinion. ^^ Notice the rewritten essay. It uses fewer words but it also conveys the same thought. That is the beauty of compound sentences and a sizeable vocabulary. You can say more with fewer words.^^ Let me reiterate that you have to mention the topic you are writing about at the beginning of the sentence and conclude in the same vein. ^^You\'re grammar is improving in your writing though which is a good thing. ^^ See you in class!   All good things, ==Teacher Charlie==   If you fight your best friends and he got a mad.He order to you that \'Pleas don\'t call me, I don\'t want a see you!!\"And when you reseach the honme, you can think your wrong.So you decide the apologize to him.In this case, we can have a two solution.First, you should wirte a letter for him.You can apologize seriously.But you can made him to more angry.And it will be doubt the truth of your letter.Second, you should sayYou can convey your mind directly.But he shouldn\'t meet you before you want to met him.Threfore My opinion is \'I disagree the Face-to-face communication is better than other types of communication, such as letters, email, or telephone calls.\'   >> I disagree with the statement that face to face communication is better than other types of communication, such as letters, emails or telephone calls. Consider this situation; you just had a disagreement with your best friend so much so that he told you not to call because he neither wants to talk or see you. As soon as you get home, you realize you are in the wrong so you decided to apologize. In this case, you can do two things. First is to write a letter and express remorse but that can make him angrier since he might doubt the contents of your letter. Second, you can directly tell him what\'s on your mind but he might not want to meet you the time you want to meet. Hence, that is why I disagree with the thought that face to face communication is better.

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