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2014-11-17 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

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Hi. Erine^^ Did you have nice weekend? I hope your days were good.^^ That is my homework I don't think 'an eye for an eye' is an appropriate punishment. If we do that, we have to deprive the opportunity for sinners to realize their fault. And we also don't give opportunity to regret their fault. It is more important that the criminals admit their bad action than they take punishment. As a result, we have to prevent the imitation of sin. and we have to think for the better and brighter future.

강사 첨삭

Hi there, [이름]!^^

I only stayed at home and took a rest last weekend.

It was good enough, though!^^

Thank you for the concern you showed. Tell me something about your weekend, too!

~~Teacher Erine~~

Hi. Erine^^

>> Correct.
Did you have nice weekend?

>> Correct.

I hope your days were good.^^

>> Correct.
That is my homework

>> This is my homework.
I don\'t think \'an eye for an eye\' is an appropriate punishment.

>> Correct.
If we do that, we have to deprive the opportunity for sinners to realize their fault.

>> If we do that, we are depriving the opportunity of the sinners to realize their fault.

And we also don\'t give opportunity to regret their fault.

>> And we also don\'t give them the opportunity to regret.
It is more important that the criminals admit their bad action than they take punishment.

>>Correct.

As a result, we have to prevent the imitation of sin. and we have to think for the better and brighter future

>> As a result, we have to prevent the imitation of sin and have to think for the better and brighter future.

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