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2014-11-19 · 첨삭 강사 Kathrine

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Sometimes, I must follow a stupid (Maybe only I think that is stupid.) process, which is maden by social regulation. Should all people be sad for their loss? Even I could see some people who can not stop laughing in a funeral arrangement. I know that it is really not good manner. We easily define someone mental illness when they act different with me. Difference,,, what is different? If a guy acts different, is he a stranger? Should all people feel same and have same action? Also, we are studying same thing in a school. My teacher is leading their student to have exact same action and thought. Recently, it becomes a big issue. When a child has differet action and thinking, all students are treated him as an outcast. But, we are acting like others in society. We are following a same rule & regulation. If we do not follow those rules, we are punished. We are define many things, which I can not understand, and even I do not agree. After all, the book tells Meursault is an outcast.

강사 첨삭

Your argument Mr. [이름] made me really think hard.

Well, definitely we are defined by the society where we are living.
We could not avoid that.

But it depends on the person to go away with the definition given to him by the people around him.

It does not mean that when you are defined, then you would go to the flow.

No. For me, it is not wrong to act differently as long as you do not harm other people by acting weird and different.

Different is unique and special. That is my own definition of that word.
Anyway, I finished your compositions. At last!!! hahaha.
Talk to you later! Very soon! :D)


Always,
Kathrine ^^
 


Sometimes, I must follow a stupid (Maybe only I think that is stupid.) process, which is maden by social regulation.

>>  Sometimes, I must follow a stupid (Maybe I am the only one thinking that it is stupid) process, which is made by the social regulation.

Should all people be sad for their loss?

>>  correct!
 Even I could see some people who can not stop laughing in a funeral arrangement.

>>  I could even see some people who could not stop laughing during funerals.

 I know that it is really not good manner.

>>  I know that it is not really a good manner.
 We easily define someone mental illness when they act different with me.

>>  We easily define someone\'s mental illness when they act differently.
 Difference,,, what is different?

>> correct! 

>> or:  Difference,,, what does different mean?

 If a guy acts different, is he a stranger? 

>>  If a guy acts different, is he a stranger?

>> or; If a guy acts differently, is he strange?
 Should all people feel same and have same action?

>>  Should people all feel the same and have the same reaction/
 Also, we are studying same thing in a school.

>>  We are also studying the same thing at school.

My teacher is leading their student to have exact same action and thought.

>>  My teacher is leading his/her students to have the exact or the same thought and action.

Recently, it becomes a big issue.

>>  correct!

>> or: It is becoming a big issue recently.

When a child has differet action and thinking, all students are treated him as an outcast.

>>  When a child has a different action and thinking, all students would treat him as an outcast.
 But, we are acting like others in society.

>>  But we are acting like other in the society.

We are following a same rule & regulation.

>>  We are following the same rules and regulations.

If we do not follow those rules, we are punished.

>>  correct!

>> or: If we will not follow those rules, we would be punished.

We are define many things, which I can not understand, and even I do not agree.

>>  We are defined by many things which I really do not understand and agree with.
 After all, the book tells Meursault is an outcast.

>>  correct!

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