homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Hi Erine.
This homework is very difficult to me.
I can not solve the problems. But I try to think...
The reason that I think of not allowing to play toy guns is because of dangerous.
Children do not know the riskiness of gun.
But adults know the dangerous things.
In Korea, we can not have the real gun across the counter. We don't few have accident by gun in civilian until now. Actually I did not understand gun problems. Because we are not permitted to have real gun. I never have seen the gun.
I heard that American buy a real gun for the child as a present.
Actually, It causes the serious accident that one boy shut the gun his brother. and he died.
Anyway, I think that If it is possible not to give the gun to children we have to not allow the gun for children.
강사 첨삭
Good morning, [이름]!^^
I think it was quite difficult for you to answer this homework
but you were able to express your ideas well!^.^
There were some corrections, though.
You can check them and if you have some questions, feel free to ask me!^^~~Teacher Erine~~
Hi Erine.
>> Correct.This homework is very difficult to me.
>> This homework is very difficult for me. I can not solve the problems. But I try to think...
>> I can not solve the problems but I will try to think.The reason that I think of not allowing to play toy guns is because of dangerous.
>> The reason that I think of not allowing children to play toy guns is because it\'s dangerous.Children do not know the riskiness of gun.
>> Correct. (**or Children do not know the risk of the gun.)But adults know the dangerous things.
>>Correct.In Korea, we can not have the real gun across the counter.
>> In Korea, we can not have a real gun over the counter.
We don\'t few have accident by gun in civilian until now.
>> We don\'t have some gun accidents by a civilian until now.
Actually I did not understand gun problems.
>> Actually, I did not understand gun problems.
Because we are not permitted to have real gun.
>> Because we are not permitted to have a real gun.
I never have seen the gun.
>> I have never seen a gun.I heard that American buy a real gun for the child as a present.
>> I heard that Americans buy a real gun as a present to a child.Actually, It causes the serious accident that one boy shut the gun his brother. and he died.
>> Actually, it can cause serious accidents. One boy shot a gun towards his brother which caused his death.Anyway, I think that If it is possible not to give the gun to children we have to not allow the gun for children.
>> Anyway, I think it is possible not to give guns to children. We shouldn\'t allow them to use guns.
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