homework
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If I were an employer, I must choose a people who have been experience of go out of business
Modern many people think go bust is humiliating.
But I think fail is very rarely exprience.
Because I am a human and human must have mistake.
And that mistake can influence the fail.
Therefore I need to watcher of fail.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]!^^
Thank you for your opinion about the matter. ^^ You have a good sense of business. Keep writing to further progress in writing in English.
All good things,
==Teacher Charlie==
If I were an employer, I must choose a people who have been experience of go out of business>> If I were an employer, I must choose people who have experience otherwise, I will go out of business.Modern many people think go bust is humiliating.
>> Nowadays, many people think that it is humiliating if a business goes bust.
But I think fail is very rarely exprience.
>> However, I think that failing is a very rare experience.
Because I am a human and human must have mistake. And that mistake can influence the fail.
>> Since I am human and humans do make mistakes, mistakes can influence how failures turn out.Therefore I need to watcher of fail.
>> Therefore, I need to be vigilant about the mistakes and failures I make.
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