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2014-12-19 · 첨삭 강사 Kris

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It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city? I agree it. In my opinion, children have to grow up in the countryside for their health. When I was young, I grew up in the countryside with my family. So, I have a lot of memory of youth. For example, I made a kate with my friends, I caught a lot of kinds of insect, I played with my friends all days, I played with earth(so, I always was dirty ^^), etc. So, I am very healthy. All children of these days don't have time to play and they are very busy because they have to learn a lot of education. So they can't meet with nature. I think that children of nowadays are very weak from disease.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! ^^ Happy Friday! ^^ Thank you for sharing your opinion about the topic. I like your ideas and I\'m happy for that. Nowadays, children must study hard for their future because it is a need. They must not waste time for playing. They must open their eyes and see the reality. The reality where in life is not easy. So, as early as possible, children must start changing their lives.   Have a good day and take care always.   ~~Teacher Kris     I agree it. >> I agree with it.In my opinion, children have to grow up in the countryside for their health. >> CorrectWhen I was young, I grew up in the countryside with my family. >> CorrectSo, I have a lot of memory of youth. >> So, I have a lot of memory about my youth.For example, I made a kate with my friends, I caught a lot of kinds of insect, I played with my friends all days, I played with earth(so, I always was dirty ^^), etc. >> for example, I made a kite with my friends, caught a lot of kinds of insects, played with the soil and etc.So, I am very healthy.>> CorrectAll children of these days don\'t have time to play and they are very busy because they have to learn a lot of education. >> All of the children these days do not have time to play because they are very busy with their schoolings.So they can\'t meet with nature. >> So, they can\'t play with the nature.I think that children of nowadays are very weak from disease. >> I think children nowadays are very prown to diseases.

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