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2014-12-23 · 첨삭 강사 Chloe

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The destruction of the world's forests is inevitable as our need for land and food grows. Do you agree? I think the destruction of the world's forests is not inevitable. There are several reasons. Eventhough we need land and food, it doesn't mean we can destroy forests. We can not destroy the world's forest. We have to live with what we have. If we really need more land , because it is full occupied, then we have to use the world's forests by trying not to destroy it. We can destroy some part of forest little, and after few year we have to plant trees back, so forest can live again. In this way we can live without destruction of the forests.

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-=Teacher Chloe=-

The destruction of the world\'s forests is inevitable as our need for land and food grows. Do you agree?
I think the destruction of the world\'s forests is not inevitable.

>>correct

There are several reasons.

>>correct

Eventhough we need land and food, it doesn\'t mean we can destroy forests.

>>correct

OR: Even though we need land and food, that doesn\'t mean we can destroy our forests.

We can not destroy the world\'s forest.

>>We can not destroy world\'s forests.

OR: We should not destroy our natural resources.

We have to live with what we have.

>>correct

If we really need more land , because it is full occupied, then we have to use the world\'s forests by trying not to destroy it.

>>If we really need more land, though it is fully occupied, we should destroy our natural resources.

We can destroy some part of forest little, and after few year we have to plant trees back, so forest can live again.

>>We can use a part of our forests but we still need to replace them by planting more trees.

In this way we can live without destruction of the forests.

>>correct

OR: In this way, we can live without destroying our forests.

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