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2014-12-24 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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That coral is on affordable situation. I bought a lottery And I won. i comprehend of that linear equation. That student is well known for his career. These days,Ice bucket challenge around the world. my friend told me that there is a man who got all the champion in WWE. His nickname is Triple H.(I'm not sure.). He got WWE champion and World heavy weight champion. He also got WWE tag team chamion,world tag team champion. He even got Intercontinental champion and european champion. Lastly he got WWF champion and IWF heavywieght champion. How amazing!!

강사 첨삭

Hi there Tom!

Merry Christmas! Thank you for being with me. ^^

I am really thankful to God that he gave you as my student.

Please tell your parents that teacher wants to say thank you to them.

Oh! Thanks for sharing your ideas about WWE.

Let us talk more about this in class.

Teacher Nina


That coral is on affordable situation.

>> The coral is affordable.
I bought a lottery And I won.

>> Better: I bought a lottery ticket and I won.
i comprehend of that linear equation.

>> Did you mean: I can comprehend with the linear equation.
That student is well known for his career.

>> correct 

>> OR: That student is well-known because of his career.
These days,Ice bucket challenge around the world.
>> Did you mean: These days, ice bucket challenge is happening around the world.

my friend told me that there is a man who got all the champion in WWE.

>> My friend told me that there is a man who is the champion in WWE.

>> OR: My friend told me about the champion in WWE.
His nickname is Triple H.(I\'m not sure.).

>> correct
He got WWE champion and World heavy weight champion.

>> Did you mean:  He became WWE champion and the also became World heaviest weight champion.

>> OR: He got the WWE champion and the also became World heaviest weight champion title.
He also got WWE tag team chamion,world tag team champion.

>> Did you mean: He also got WWE and world tag team champion title.

>> OR: He also became the WWE and world tag team champion.
He even got Intercontinental champion and european champion.

>> He even became the Intercontinental and European champion.

>> OR: He even got the Intercontinental and European champion title.
Lastly he got WWF champion and IWF heavywieght champion.

>> Lastly, he got WWF champion and IWF heavyweight champion title.

>> OR: Lastly, he became WWF champion and IWF heavyweight champion title.

How amazing!!

>> correct

>> OR: It Is amazing.

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