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What gives us more pleasure and satisfaction: the pursuit of our desires or the attainment of them?
I get more pleasure and satisfaction when I attainme of my desires. I like pursuiting my desires. I agree with the opionion that we get passion when we pursuits our desires, and passion make us happy. However, in my case, I feel more pleasure and satisfaction when I attain it. The result that I made makes me happy, so I work hard to attain of desires.
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According to what I have read, it says that \"The proponents of attainment of desires say that achievement of desires, the motive of every pursuit, is the only way to happiness. They support their claim by saying that achievement is the final point of all human actions done in regard to pursuit of particular desire and outcome is what determines happiness not the pursuit. They exemplify that people and nations who have attained more are better than those who have attained less.\" ~Pursuit of Desires or their Attainment. So, I guess you are a happy person.
-Teacher Chloe
What gives us more pleasure and satisfaction: the pursuit of our desires or the attainment of them?I get more pleasure and satisfaction when I attainme of my desires.
>>I get more pleasure and satisfaction when I attain all my desires.
I like pursuiting my desires.
>>I like pursuing my desires.
I agree with the opionion that we get passion when we pursuits our desires, and passion make us happy.
>>I agree with the opinion that we get more pleasure and satisfaction when we attain our desires because it make us even happier.
However, in my case, I feel more pleasure and satisfaction when I attain it.
>>So, I feel satisfied when I attain them.
The result that I made makes me happy, so I work hard to attain of desires.
>>It makes me happy so I work hard for them.
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