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2015-01-09 · 첨삭 강사 Faye

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How would your role models act and carry themselves? My role model is a man who is famous in korea. He is a singer but he donate a lot to people. He always try to help other people who is suffer from disease or lives in poor country. He act honestly, and he enjoy giving his money to whom need even though he is not millionaire. I was so impressed by his truly heart for people. Not only he donate his money, but also he go to the place and work for them. He carry briquette to old people. Moreover, he always ask for help to the public to work with him.

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Hi [이름]! I missed you! I am happy that you were able to accomplished your homework! Thank you for this! Have a great weekend! I hope to talk to you again! Take care! -T.Faye   How would your role models act and carry themselves?>> CORRECT:My role model is a man who is famous in korea. >> CORRECT: He is a singer but he donate a lot to people. >> He is a singer but he donate to a lot of people.  He always try to help other people who is suffering from disease or lives in poor country. >>  He always try to help other people who is suffer from disease or lives in poor country.  He act honestly, and he enjoy giving his money to whom need even though he is not millionaire.  >> He act honestly, and he enjoy giving his money to the needy even though he is not a millionaire. I was so impressed by his truly heart for people. >> I was so impressed with his heart for the people. Not only he donate his money, but also he go to the place and work for them. >> He does not only donate his money, but he also go to some places and work for them.  He carry briquette to old people. >>  He carry briquette of old people.  Moreover, he always ask for help to the public to work with him. >>  Moreover, he always asked for help to the public to work with him.

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