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2015-01-08 · 첨삭 강사 Chloe

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Some people believe in the traditional idea that the woman's place is in the home, while others say that idea is outdated and that women should play an increasingly important role in the workplace of the future. What is your opinion? I agree with second opinion. I think the traditional idea of the woman's place is outdated. I think women should treat as same as men. They can be anywhere, anyplace where they want to be, and they can do important role in the workplace as the men does. I think woman should not only live in the house. If she has big ambition, she should play an increasingly important role in the workplace.

강사 첨삭

It has been long debated over the woman\'s role; Where should she be? Is it the workplace or the home? In my opinion, women should not confine themselves to be just housewives. Instead they should actively get involved in social and economic activities by making their share of contribution. Well, men and women have equal ability and opportunities. Modern women should utilize their capabilities and work ability not only to achieve independence but also to contribute in development and advancement of the society. Anyway, have a good night! Sweet dreams deary! I will call you again tomorrow. -Teacher Chloe Some people believe in the traditional idea that the woman\'s place is in the home, while others say that idea is outdated and that women should play an increasingly important role in the workplace of the future. What is your opinion?I agree with second opinion. >>I agree with the latter opinion. I think the traditional idea of the woman\'s place is outdated. >>I think that the traditional idea that woman\'s place is in the home is outdated. I think women should treat as same as men. >>I think women and men should be treated equally. They can be anywhere, anyplace where they want to be, and they can do important role in the workplace as the men does. >>They can be anywere and in any place where they want to be. Also, they do important roles in workplaces like men. I think woman should not only live in the house. >>I think a woman should not only stay in the home. If she has big ambition, she should play an increasingly important role in the workplace. >>Correct!

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