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2015-01-12 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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The most noticeable problem in the upcoming 20 years is the war. There have always been the terrible wars in the worldwide before the modern era. Even until now, a lot of victims in the cruel fights are dying somewhere. These dreadful wars happened because some people are not reluctant to murder other innocent people in order to obtain or maintain their certain political or economic benefits. However, it seems not to be ceased in the future. The destructive power of the weapons in the whole world will be more enhanced like nuclear weapons. We must consider this situation carefully so as to prevent human from being extinct.

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The most noticeable problem in the upcoming 20 years is the war.

>> Correct!

There have always been the terrible wars in the worldwide before the modern era.

>> There have always been terrible wars worldwide before the modern era.

Even until now, a lot of victims in the cruel fights are dying somewhere.

>> Even until now, a lot of victims of cruel fights are dying somewhere.

These dreadful wars happened because some people are not reluctant to murder other innocent people in order to obtain or maintain their certain political or economic benefits.

>> Correct!

However, it seems not to be ceased in the future.

>> Correct!

OR>> However, it seems to continue in the future.

OR>> However, it does not seem to cease in the future.

The destructive power of the weapons in the whole world will be more enhanced like nuclear weapons.

>> Correct!

We must consider this situation carefully so as to prevent human from being extinct.

>> We must consider this situation carefully so as to prevent humans from going extinct.

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