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2015-01-14 · 첨삭 강사 Chloe

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Some people believe that competitive sports have a positive effect on children's education, while others believe there is no place for such sports in schools. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion. Some people think that competitive sports have a positive effect on children's education. A child can be more active by competitive sports. Moreover it help children to focuse on thir activity. However, others believe that competitive sports have a negative effect on children's education. They argue that it must be moved away from school. They think children who play a competitive sports only focuse on win. They only want to win and they are frustrated when they lose. I also think it is not good for children to play a competitive sports. I don't want children to be only focusing winning.

강사 첨삭

I understand your opinions and they are great. In my own opinion, competitions don\'t have to be negative or unhealthy. Playing sports can help kids understand how competition works in a friendly environment, and that is, if you try your hardest. You have a better chance to succeed. Even when he doesn\'t win, he can learn a valuable lesson: that you can\'t win every time. Losing with his team can also increase self-esteem, as he learns to hold his head high and feel proud for trying his best. Well, it depends on every child. They jut learn how to accept failures in life and make them motivations to succeed in every game they have. -Teacher Chloe Some people believe that competitive sports have a positive effect on children\'s education, while others believe there is no place for such sports in schools. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.Some people think that competitive sports have a positive effect on children\'s education. >>Correct! A child can be more active by competitive sports. >>Correct! Moreover it help children to focuse on thir activity. >>Moreover, competitive sports help children to be more focused in their activities. However, others believe that competitive sports have a negative effect on children\'s education. >>Correct! They argue that it must be moved away from school. >>They argue that competitive sports do not have place in schools. They think children who play a competitive sports only focuse on win. >>They think that children who plays competitive sports only focus on winning. They only want to win and they are frustrated when they lose. >>They only want to win and they get frustrated when they lose. I also think it is not good for children to play a competitive sports. >>I also think that competitive sports are not good for children. I don\'t want children to be only focusing winning. >>I don\'t want children to only focus on winning.

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