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2015-01-16 · 첨삭 강사 Chloe

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I disagree that goverments should provide free healthcare for all their citizens. There are a pros and cons in free healthcare. Naturally, free halthcare is good policy for a poor people, eldery and so on. but in terms of demerit, this policy can be a dangerous thing for normal people. If goverment provide them with treatment for free, they can get a lazy consious. Also, abuse drug can be prevalent in society. and To secure these enormous budget, goverment will collect taxs(=lavy). For instance, Well welfare country such as Filand, Netherlands and other north europe countries have these problems.To conclude,(=in conclusion) Providing people with some of treatment for free is good whereas treatment for free is not appropriate for people.

강사 첨삭

Yes, I agree that there are pros and cons of providing healthcare. One of the cons is, free health care services leads to overcrowding in hospitals. Another disadvantage of it would be the shortage of doctors and nurses. \"Free\" health care is not,  in fact, free. It only appears that way in the short term. Anyway, enjoy the rest of your day! Celebrate Friday dear! Have fun! -Teacher Chloe  \"Free\" health care is not, in fact, free--it only appears that way in the short term. Read more : http://www.ehow.com/list_7337325_disadvantages-health-care.htmlRead more : http://www.ehow.com/list_7337325_disadvantages-health-care.html I disagree that goverments should provide free healthcare for all their citizens. >>Correct! There are a pros and cons in free healthcare. >>There are pros and cons of providing free healthcare. Naturally, free halthcare is good policy for a poor people, eldery and so on. >>Naturally, providing freel healthcare for poor citizens and elderly is good. but in terms of demerit, this policy can be a dangerous thing for normal people. >>But, the demerits can be dangerous because it will lead to a poor quality of services. If goverment provide them with treatment for free, they can get a lazy consious. >>If governments provide free healthcare for all citizens, they may get lazy to work hard for their needs. Also, abuse drug can be prevalent in society. >>Also, drug abuse can be prevalent in the society. and To secure these enormous budget, goverment will collect taxs(=lavy). >>To secure enormous budget for the welfare, governments should collect tax. For instance, Well welfare country such as Filand, Netherlands and other north europe countries have these problems. >>Countries such as Finland, The Netherlands and other North European countries have this problem. To conclude,(=in conclusion) Providing people with some of treatment for free is good whereas treatment for free is not appropriate for people. >>In conclusion, providing people with some of the treatments for free is good but not providing a free healthcare is not.  

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