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2015-01-20 · 첨삭 강사 Chloe

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Nowadays many jobs are more stressful and the working day is longer. What are the reasons for this? What can employers do to help employees? We've been fought for working environment improvement for a long time. As industry are growing, people spend much of time working in company and plant than working in house. In agricultural age, most of people worked in farm plowing a field. But As a lot of complicated work begin to emerge in Infromation age, there are various occupations. These occupation cluster have a common character that it is a difficult and complex. So many employee have been feeling a stress during business hours(=on duty). People will fight for catching a comfortable working environment. To conclude, employers make a better working environment for employee's welfare. the more employer is considerate towards his(her) employee, the more employee is to be a avid personnel.

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In this modern era, many jobs are becoming very stressful for workers. Along with that, their working hours also expands. Many employees are now facing stressful jobs and long working hours due to a high level of unemployment and their financial needs. In spite of this, companies should take measures to lessen the pressure put on their employees and the hours of work for the sake of their profits. Well, we should not stress ourselves. -Teacher Chloe Nowadays many jobs are more stressful and the working day is longer. What are the reasons for this? What can employers do to help employees?We\'ve been fought for working environment improvement for a long time. >>We have been fighting for the improvement of every working environment for a long time now. As industry are growing, people spend much of time working in company and plant than working in house. >>As the industry grows, people spend more time working in companies than planting on farms. In agricultural age, most of people worked in farm plowing a field. >>In the agricultural age, most people worked on farms and plowing fields. But As a lot of complicated work begin to emerge in Infromation age, there are various occupations. >>But, there are a lot of complicated work and various occupations begin to emerge in the information age. These occupation cluster have a common character that it is a difficult and complex. >>These occupations and work have their common character, they are difficult and complex. So many employee have been feeling a stress during business hours(=on duty). >>So, that is the reason why many workers feel stressed during business hours. People will fight for catching a comfortable working environment. >>People are fighthing for more comfortable working environment. To conclude, employers make a better working environment for employee\'s welfare.>>Employers should make a better working environment for the welfare of their employees. the more employer is considerate towards his(her) employee, the more employee is to be a avid personnel. >>The more considerate the employers, the more the employees will become avid personnels.

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