homework
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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others think that there are more advantages living in an apartment. What is your own opinion?
I prefer to live in a house than apartment. There are many advantages to living in a house. First, people lived in a house don't need to pay thier maintenance fees.
If i live in an apartment ,i have to pay my maintenance fee. The more economic condition is shaky, the more i have to pay a maintenance fee.
it may be a personel burden. Secondly, living a house is more safe than living an apartment. Because there are a lot of people lived togther in an apartment,
if one person make a safety accident such as fire, every people lived in an apartment will be in danger. finally, Because house has a yard, people can take a rest and
raise flowers in a yard. So i prefer to live in a house.
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It can be said that the advantages of a house are the disadvantages of an apartment, and vice versa. People can only find a suitable accommodation by taking account of their practical conditions and future plans. As for me, I prefer to live in a house. So, we have the same preference. The biggest advantage of a house is that it provides enough space for a big family. As what you have said, there may be a frontyard or a backyard which can be used as a playground for the family, especially children. Aside from these, houses are usually built in an open ground and are not far from each other. So, neighborhoods can play together around houses, thus building good connections.
-Teacher Chloe
Some people prefer to live in a house, while others think that there are more advantages living in an apartment. What is your own opinion?I prefer to live in a house than apartment.
>>I prefer to live in a house to an apartment.
There are many advantages to living in a house.
>>There are many advantages living in a house.
First, people lived in a house don\'t need to pay thier maintenance fees.
>>First, people who live in their own houses don\'t need to pay for rental fees. If i live in an apartment ,i have to pay my maintenance fee.
>>If I live in an apartment, I have to pay for rental fee.
The more economic condition is shaky, the more i have to pay a maintenance fee.
>>The worse the economic condition, the higher rental fee I have to ay.it may be a personel burden.
>>It is a financial burden.
Secondly, living a house is more safe than living an apartment.
>>Secondly, living in a house is safer than living in an apartment.
Because there are a lot of people lived togther in an apartment,
>>It is because there are a lot of people live in an apartment building.if one person make a safety accident such as fire, every people lived in an apartment will be in danger.
>>When there is a fire, people in an apartment building will be in danger.
finally, Because house has a yard, people can take a rest and raise flowers in a yard.
>>Lastly, houses have yards, people can raise flowers and take a rest in there.
So i prefer to live in a house.
>>So, I prefer to live in a house.
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