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2015-01-29 · 첨삭 강사 Shanee

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What's the meaning 'Composition making!' I guess it is not important specially^^ Originally our communication was not exist. people talked with bodylanguages and Hieroglyph. Over time, humans made a letter. Thence humans freely communicated each others. For example about Korea, When Country had something to dangerous, Seoul(Hun-Ywang) knew what's happening but far districts dre didn't know anything. So as a result, 'Fenghua' is maded. If war rised, put fire to Beacon Hill, everyone can know. As more and more develop, Now we can communicate with people of different area using phone. And we can send a message, calling, chatting and so on through the Internet, mobilephone.

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Hi there [이름]!   Thank you so much for making this and for sharing your thoughts! I appreciate your effort! Kindly check the corrections I made below. See you tomorrow!   ~Teacher Shanee   What\'s the meaning \'Composition making!\' >>> What\'s the meaning of \'Composition making\'?I guess it is not important specially^^ >>> I guess it is not important anyway.Originally our communication was not exist. >>> Originally, communication using words did not exist. people talked with bodylanguages and Hieroglyph. >>> People used to communicate through body language and Hieroglyph.Over time, humans made a letter. >>> Correct! Thence humans freely communicated each others. >>> Then, humans freely communicated with each other.For example about Korea, When Country had something to dangerous, Seoul(Hun-Ywang) knew what\'s happening but far districts dre didn\'t know anything. >>> For example, in Korea, when our country could sense something dangerous, there are some places that could be notified but there were some which couldn\'t be. So as a result, \'Fenghua\' is maded. >>> So as a result, Fenghua was made. If war rised, put fire to Beacon Hill, everyone can know. >>> If war rose, people put fire on the beacon hill, and witht hat everyone would know.As more and more develop, Now we can communicate with people of different area using phone. >>> As technology develops, our way of communicating to other people becomes easier because of the devices being invented. And we can send a message, calling, chatting and so on through the Internet, mobilephone. >>>We can send messages, call, chat and son through the use of Internet and smartphones.

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