HOMEWORK
학생이 쓴 원문
what do you have that you can not live without?
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We need many things to live
I thought, if I understood the word by dictionary, money is very important.
Currently we live in free market systems
Money is connected to survive.
Because I used the money when I bought some food and paid the rent fee of house.
So, we have to go to work and earn money.
money is not substitute for everything like a family, friend.
There words have different a standard of value.
So, money is very important, but that is not at all.
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what do you have that you can not live without?
>> CORRECT:==============================================We need many things to live
>> CORRECT:I thought, if I understood the word by dictionary, money is very important.
>> I thought, if I understood the word by dictionary it would be okay because money is very important.Currently we live in free market systems
>> Currently, we live in the free market systems.Money is connected to survive.
>> Money is needed to survive.Because I used the money when I bought some food and paid the rent fee of house.
>> CORRECT:So, we have to go to work and earn money.
>> CORRECT:money is not substitute for everything like a family, friend.
>> Money can be a substiture for everything: family and friends, etc.There words have different a standard of value.
>> CORRECT:So, money is very important, but that is not at all.
> So, money is very important but, there are also more important things.
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