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2015-02-04 · 첨삭 강사 Venus

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February 2, 1709 was when British sailor Alexander Selkirk was rescued after being marooned on a desert island for 5 years, his story inspires "Robinson Crusoe". Write about what you would do, if you were abandoned in a desolate island. if i was abandoned in a desolate island, i would die. First i will look around a island, l look for a resource of life such as water, fruits, vegetables and so on. but if there are not sufficient resources, i may find a way to escape from a desolate island. but i have no strength of making a raft of log. So i will choose lefting in a island over consuming remanent resources. when i watched a 'cast away' film, i have a great regard for the main character. he also was abandoned in a desolate island. but he can escape from island with a strong will. when i run into similar danger, i will die because of famine.......

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]!

 

Here are some reminders:

1. Capitalize the first letter of  a sentence.

2. Capitalize \'I\'.

3. The Present Unreal Conditional is used to talk about what you would generally do in imaginary situations.

4. In the Present Unreal Conditional, the form \"was\" is not considered grammatically correct. In written English or in testing situations, you should always use \"were.\" However, in everyday conversation, \"was\" is often used.

5. Only the word \"if\" is used with the Present Unreal Conditional because you are discussing imaginary situations. \"When\" cannot be used.

 

Check this out:

http://www.englishpage.com/conditional/presentconditional.html

 

Teacher Venus^^

 

if i was abandoned in a desolate island, i would die.

>>>If I were abandoned in a desolate island, I would die.

 

First i will look around a island, l look for a resource of life such as water, fruits, vegetables and so on.

>>>First I would look around the island. l\'d look for resources of life such as water, fruits, vegetables and so on.


but if there are not sufficient resources, i may find a way to escape from a desolate island.

>>>But if there were no sufficient resources, I might not find a way to escape from a desolate island.

 

but i have no strength of making a raft of log.

>>>But I have no strength to make a raft of log.


So i will choose lefting in a island over consuming remanent resources.

>>>So I would choose living in the island while consuming the remaining resources.

 

when i watched a \'cast away\' film, i have a great regard for the main character.

>>>When I watched \'Cast Away\' film, I have a great regard for the main character.


he also was abandoned in a desolate island.

>>>He was also abandoned in a desolate island.

 

but he can escape from island with a strong will.

>>>But he could escape from the island with a strong will.

 

when i run into similar danger, i will die because of famine.......

>>>If I ran into a similar danger, I would die because of famine.

 

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