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2015-02-05 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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When thecirculation of deep sea current stop,the North part of earth will be frozen. Deep sea current help to carry the temperture of the earth. But when ir stop,The on side of earth will be very hot and the other side will be frozen. the situation like the movie tittled "Tomorrow' can happen.

강사 첨삭

I appreciate your time for today,

After I read your essay, I felt a bit scared.

I hope that the current won\'t stop.
These days, we are experiencing climate change that leads to different problems.

I am wondering Tom, what will happen if suddenly the Earth stopped rotating?

It will be a very big problem and people might think it\'s the end.

Let us hope that it won\'t really happen.

Thanks for sharing your ideas today TOM.
Please observe the proper spacing of words and sentence patterns.

Talk to you soon.
Teacher Nina


When thecirculation of deep sea current stop,the North part of earth will be frozen.

>> Did you mean: When the circulation in the deep sea stops, the northern part of the Earth will be frozen.

>> When the current and circulation in the deep sea stops, the northern part of the Earth will be experience extreme cold weather.
Deep sea current help to carry the temperture of the earth.

>> Did you mean: Deep sea current helps to maintain the temperature of the Earth.
But when ir stop,The on side of earth will be very hot and the other side will be frozen.

>> But when it stopped, one side of the globe will be very hot and the other side will be frozen.
>> But when it stopped, both side of the globe will experience extreme weather conditions.

the situation like the movie tittled \"Tomorrow\' can happen.

>> The situation in the movie titled, \"Tomorrow\" might happen.

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