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2015-02-10 · 첨삭 강사 Venus

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Worst quake in 8 years kills some 50,000 (Calabria, Italy). Over the past several years, think about the natural disasters that have taken place in your area, in your state, in your country, and around the world. What do you think has been the greatest natural disaster and why? The greatest natural disaster I has ever been in korea is flood. Rain season has begun on july and august in korea. There is a long rainy season. After the rain season is over, the heat wave began. These are natural phenomenon. But some of people are suffering for Rain season. Although a moderation of rain helps agriculture increase their crop, excessive raining is harmful for people. I watched a suffering people from flood on TV a couple of years ago. A lot of water enter to Some people's house and many cars and livestocks floated in water. The flood is the greatest catastrophe I has ever been.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]!

 

It\'s great to check your homework again. I like how you provided details and examples for your writng. 

 

Teacher Venus^^

 

The greatest natural disaster I has ever been in korea is flood.

>>>The greatest natural disaster I have ever experienced in Korea is flood.

 

Rain season has begun on july and august in korea.

>>>Rainy season begins in July and August in Korea.

 

There is a long rainy season.

>>>CORRECT

 

After the rain season is over, the heat wave began.

>>>After the rainy season is over, the heat wave begins.


These are natural phenomenon.

>>>These are natural phenomena.


But some of people are suffering for Rain season.

>>>But some people are suffering from rainy seasons.

 

Although a moderation of rain helps agriculture increase their crop, excessive raining is harmful for people.

>>>Although moderate raining helps agriculture increase their crop, excessive raining is harmful for people.

 

I watched a suffering people from flood on TV a couple of years ago.

>>>I watched suffering people from flood on TV a couple of years ago.


A lot of water enter to Some people\'s house and many cars and livestocks floated in water.

>>>A lot of water enter some people\'s houses and many cars and livestock floated in water.

 

The flood is the greatest catastrophe I has ever been.

>>>The flood is the greatest catastrophe I have ever been.


 

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