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2015-02-27 · 첨삭 강사 Jessie

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I want to talk about three ways which are getting clean water for everyone. The first, nations shouldn't throw away factories's pollution water anymore. because we have a technique that sea is changed water which is we can drink by our technique. The second, mineral water industry shouldn't make a company anymore. The third, all nations have to plant trees and protection. Many trees can keep on a lot of water. It is very important because nations is becoming a desertification.

강사 첨삭

Happy Friday! Thanks for sharing your ideas. Nowadays, it is possible to do a lot of things because of Science so I believe that mankind can create something for the future. Planting trees is a very good way to deal with this problem. Let\'s hope for a better future. Enjoy your weekend! ~T. Jessie~ I want to talk about three ways which are getting clean water for everyone. >> I want to talk about three ways which will help us get clean water for everyone. The first, nations shouldn\'t throw away factories\'s pollution water anymore. >> The first is nations shouldn\'t throw away factories\'s polluted water anymore. because we have a technique that sea is changed water which is we can drink by our technique. >> Because we have a technique that changes sea water to drinking water. The second, mineral water industry shouldn\'t make a company anymore. >> The second is mineral water industry shouldn\'t make a company anymore. OR>> Do you mean: There shouldn\'t be mineral water industry anymore. The third, all nations have to plant trees and protection. >> The third is all nations have to plant trees and protect them. Many trees can keep on a lot of water. >> Many trees can keep a lot of water. It is very important because nations is becoming a desertification. >> It is very important because nations are becoming like deserts.

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