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I want to talk about three ways which are getting clean water for everyone. The first, nations shouldn't throw away factories's pollution water anymore. because we have a technique that sea is changed water which is we can drink by our technique. The second, mineral water industry shouldn't make a company anymore. The third, all nations have to plant trees and protection. Many trees can keep on a lot of water. It is very important because nations is becoming a desertification.
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Happy Friday!
Thanks for sharing your ideas.
Nowadays, it is possible to do a lot of things because of Science so I believe that mankind can create something for the future.
Planting trees is a very good way to deal with this problem.
Let\'s hope for a better future. Enjoy your weekend!
~T. Jessie~
I want to talk about three ways which are getting clean water for everyone.
>> I want to talk about three ways which will help us get clean water for everyone.
The first, nations shouldn\'t throw away factories\'s pollution water anymore.
>> The first is nations shouldn\'t throw away factories\'s polluted water anymore.
because we have a technique that sea is changed water which is we can drink by our technique.
>> Because we have a technique that changes sea water to drinking water.
The second, mineral water industry shouldn\'t make a company anymore.
>> The second is mineral water industry shouldn\'t make a company anymore.
OR>> Do you mean: There shouldn\'t be mineral water industry anymore.
The third, all nations have to plant trees and protection.
>> The third is all nations have to plant trees and protect them.
Many trees can keep on a lot of water.
>> Many trees can keep a lot of water.
It is very important because nations is becoming a desertification.
>> It is very important because nations are becoming like deserts.
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