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2015-03-13 · 첨삭 강사 Shanee

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Describe your ideal town or city, why you would want to live there, and what you would do there. I enjoy to live in Seoul. Seoul is a wonderful place to live. Wouldn't it be nice If there is not pollution problem, In spite of air pollution, I remain satisfied with Seoul life. I like Seoul life because Seoul is well designed and is equipped with public utilities and modern amenities. I want to enjoy these utilities and amenities.

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 Hello there Sir [이름]!   I am aslo satisfied with the place where I live in. I can see a huge plantation of strawberries in front of our house. I can also experience solemnity at night since people in the neigborhood are disciplined. However, they are starting to develop the place so a lot of establishments are being built just around the strawberry farm. So it\'s sad because there is a big possibility that the good view  that I see everyday could disappear in the near future. Well, I really hope not!   Anyway, thanks for sending this. See you again tomorrow!   ~Teacher Shanee   Describe your ideal town or city, why you would want to live there, and what you would do there.I enjoy to live in Seoul. >>> Correct!Seoul is a wonderful place to live. >>> Seoul is a wonderful place to live in.Wouldn\'t it be nice If there is not pollution problem, >>> It would be nice if there is not pollution problem. In spite of air pollution, I remain satisfied with Seoul life. >>> Correct! >>> OR: In spite of air pollution, I remain satisfied with my life in Seoul.I like Seoul life because Seoul is well designed and is equipped with public utilities and modern amenities. >>> I like the life in Seoul because this city is well-designed and has public utilities and modern amenities.I want to enjoy these utilities and amenities. >>> Correct!

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