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Hello there!!!
We really need to put our best foot forward to achieve a goal in our life.
I know it will be a long process but if we don\'t give up....we can be happy and successful!!!!
Have a great day ahead!!!!
I guess I will be born in other galaxy and get other life.
But I have no idea whether I will still be a human or other thing.
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Lots of religion always tell to people about afterlife.
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Some of them said we would get to heaven or hell based on our life before the death.
>>Some of them said that we would go to heaven or hell based on our life before death.
Or other religion said we would be born again.
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Thus, both of them mentioned afterlife and told us we should believe in Karma to be kind, love and help the other people if we would like to get a good conditions after death.
>>Thus, both of them mentioned about the afterlife and they told us that we should believe in Karma, so we have to love, help and be kind to other people if we would like to be in a good condition after death.
Furthermore, scientist also said there were a lot of galaxies which were the similar with ours.
>>Furthermore, the scientist also said that there are a lot of galaxies which are similar to ours.
I think humans and animals might be there, which we could never get there before we face death, with the same living style.
>>I think humans and animals might be already there so we won\'t get there before facing death.
If a person will be born during war, he would think about there as a hell.
>>If a person was born during the war, he would consider it as hell.
On the other hand, if a person will be born in a good place, he would think about it is as heaven.
>>On the other hand if a person was born in a good place, it could be heaven.
I have no idea how to finish this answering but I just believe in what I said. Hence I have to live nicely.
>>I have no idea how to finish answering this question but I believe in what I\'ve said. Hence I have to live in a nice way.
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