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If I can eliminate on weakness in my life, I want to eliminate a fear. I am very shy when I met new people or some situations. So I won't go on rides in amusement park. I also won't watch horror movies or sad movies. In my country, many bad accidents occur. I can't know a safe place for my family. And If I can't pray everyday, I can't keep on my life.
강사 첨삭
Good morning!
Thanks for sharing this to me.
I am glad to read it. I hope you can overcome whatever fears you have.
Let God guide you. have a great day!
~T. Jessie~
If I can eliminate on weakness in my life, I want to eliminate a fear.
>> If I can eliminate a weakness in my life, I want to eliminate fear.
I am very shy when I met new people or some situations.
>> I am very shy when I meet new people or some situations.
So I won\'t go on rides in amusement park.
>> So I don\'t go on rides in amusement parks.
I also won\'t watch horror movies or sad movies.
>> I also don\'t watch horror movies or sad movies.
In my country, many bad accidents occur.
>> Correct!
I can\'t know a safe place for my family.
>> I don\'t know a safe place for my family.
And If I can\'t pray everyday, I can\'t keep on my life.
>> And if I can\'t pray everyday, I can\'t keep on with my life.
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