Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Hello, Teacher Marie.
My today's school class is going to start at 10:30.
So I finished my homework earlier than usual.
Now, I'm going to school.
See you tomorrow.
If you had to give up your cellphone, your computer, or your TV, which one item would you choose to give up and why?
In this case, I would give up my TV.
The reason is very simple.
Watching TV is only for me, but using cellphone and computer is related to not only me but also many other people.
If I don't have a cellphone, many people would have a difficulty with contacting me.
Moreover, my working and studying are suffered if I don't have a computer.
It is obvious that many people would experience discomfort if I couldn't perform my work assigned to me.
I don't want to make many people be uncomfortable, whereas I can bear my life without a TV.
Therefore, I would readily chose to live without a TV.
강사 첨삭
Hi Kaylee! Thanks for doing your homework. I would have to agree with you! I can live without TV too, but not without a computer or a cellphone. I\'ve been living without television for more than 5 years now and I\'m still okay. I survived! Haha! Good luck with school today.
Please check the corrections below.
Ciao!
~Teacher Marie~
Hello, Teacher Marie.
>> CORRECT! My today\'s school class is going to start at 10:30.
>> My class in school today is going to start at 10:30.
So I finished my homework earlier than usual.
>> CORRECT! Now, I\'m going to school.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I\'m going to school now.See you tomorrow.
>> CORRECT!
In this case, I would give up my TV.
>> CORRECT! The reason is very simple.
>> CORRECT! Watching TV is only for me, but using cellphone and computer is related to not only me but also many other people.
>> Watching TV only affects me, but using my cellphone and computer affects other people.
If I don\'t have a cellphone, many people would have a difficulty with contacting me.
>> If I don\'t have a cellphone, many people would have difficulty contacting me.
Moreover, my working and studying are suffered if I don\'t have a computer.>> Moreover, my work and my studies are going to suffer if I don\'t have a computer.
It is obvious that many people would experience discomfort if I couldn\'t perform my work assigned to me.
>> It is obvious that many people would experience discomfort if I couldn\'t perform the work assigned to me.
I don\'t want to make many people be uncomfortable, whereas I can bear my life without a TV.
>> I don\'t want to make many people feel uncomfortable, whereas I can bear life without a TV.Therefore, I would readily chose to live without a TV.
>> Therefore, I would definitely choose to live without a TV.
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