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Hello [이름]!!

Thank you for your homework!!!

I am very happy that you are eager to learn a lot of things and you want to know which field you need to practice more. It is a good thing and it means that you are interested in learning a lot of things. I commend you for that.
T. Jeny

ESSAY: What important life lessons have you learned?
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I should avoid blaming other people from the problems since I am the one who choice every single time among plenty of way to do.
>>I should avoid blaming other people from the problems that may occur since I was the one who made a choice.
Sometimes, I faced problems and fall in a deep suffering.

>>Sometimes, I faced problems and fall in deep suffering.

 At first, I blamed a person who had informed me of wrong information, and who had persuaded me to do that.

>>At first, I blamed a person who had informed me of the wrong information, and who had persuaded me to do that.

Few days later, I realized it was my fault because I am the final arbiter.

>>A few days later, I realized it was my fault because I am the final arbiter.

Furthermore it’s my life, if I make a mistake I am the one who need to face, solve, and endure it.
>>Furthermore it’s my life if I make a mistake I am the one who needs to face, solve and endure it.
Although people give me tips, I have to consider and think about it more seriously.

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After that I act it without any hesitancy.

>>After that I do it without hesitation.