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2015-04-24 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

학생이 쓴 원문

This is my late homework. ----------------------------------- At fisrt, I can pick up synopsis. A good story has power to drag people attention. And it is possible to touch them. Second, the factor is power of direction. According to the understanding of story, who made the movie, the film can upgrade. At last I can't say without the actors. By the expression of actors, we can choose the movie to watch or not. But I think the harmony of factors is most important to make good movie.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름],

You are improving, don\'t you aren\'t.

I appreciate you doing good with your homework. 
Keep on reading! Keep on practicing! 
Have a great evening ahead. 
Teacher Jeny ^_^

 

At fisrt, I can pick up synopsis.

>>At first, I will choose synopsis.
A good story has power to drag people attention.

>>A good story has the power to drag people\'s attention.

 And it is possible to touch them.

>>And it is possible to touch their feeings.

Second, the factor is power of direction.

>>The second factor is the power of direction.

According to the understanding of story, who made the movie, the film can upgrade.
>>The film can upgrade with the director\'s point of view.

At last I can\'t say without the actors.

>>And lastly, the actors.

By the expression of actors, we can choose the movie to watch or not.

>>With the actors, we can determine if we will watch the movie or not.

But I think the harmony of factors is most important to make good movie.

>>But I guess the most important thing is harmony.

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