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2011-04-07 · 첨삭 강사 Christine

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3. Can you tell me about your hobbies? I have various hobbies such as swimming jazz dancing and yoga. Thesedays I'm so intersted in meditation and driving. Those are have different attract. I always try to go meditation center for lose my stress. And It makes me feel easy and comfortable. Driving is my 2nd intersting hobbies nowdays because whenever I want to go. Actually I am a bigginer with car drive. That's why more intersting hobbies than other hobbies.

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Hello pretty [이름]!! ^^,   Thanks for writing!! Have a great night. ^^  ~ T. Chris  ~ 1. Can you tell me about your hobbies? >> Correct!I have various hobbies such as swimming jazz dancing and yoga.>> I have various hobbies such as swimming, jazz dancing, and yoga. Thesedays I'm so intersted in meditation and driving.>> These days, I’m so interested in meditation and driving. Those are have different attract.>> They are both interesting in different ways. I always try to go meditation center for lose my stress. And It makes me feel easy and comfortable.>> I always tried to go to a meditation center to manage my stress and it makes me feel at ease and comfortable.  Driving is my 2nd intersting hobbies nowdays because whenever I want to go. Actually I am a bigginer with car drive.>> Secondly, I am interested in driving nowadays. Actually, I am still a beginner. That's why more intersting hobbies than other hobbies. >> That’s why I think it’s more challenging than other hobbies.  Here were your other answers:  1. Describe a movie that inspired you the most.The most impressive movie for me is 'Eat, Pray and Love' The movie actress a person who is traveld for herself, Julia Roberts.Eat in Rome, Pray in India, Love in Balie.When I watched the movie, I also want to find my real goal life likewise the actress.I would like to enjoy in my life even if I become a cabin crew. With corrections: The most impressive movie for me is the movie entitled 'Eat, Pray and Love' The movie actress, Julia Roberts, portrayed the life of a woman who traveled around the world all by herself. The complete title is ‘Eat in Rome, Pray in India, and Love in Bali.’  When I watched the movie, I was inspired to find my real purpose in life just like the woman in the story.  I would like to have a life full of joy even if I become a cabin crew member. 2.  Have you ever had a part-time job before? This was your answer: I had a part-time job when I was in university. I taught primary school students. It was not difficult because of just simple and easy English. Sometimes I suffered from problems with my work but I overcame problems because of my students. Even though I taught Knowledge of English I was able to enghance my working skills thanks to children. With Corrections: I had a part-time job when I was in university. I taught primary school students.  It was not that difficult because I just taught English basics. Sometimes, I suffered some work problems but I was able to overcome them because of my students.  I was not only able to impart knowledge in English but I was also able to enhance my working skills, thanks to the children. 3. Why are you interested in this company? This was your answer: I was intersted in your company because of variety services. I had a part time job in English academy. I was able to enjoy my work thanks to the children. Asiana company has a lot of services among the services I was so intersted in with service offer to children. So If I become a Asiana cabin crew. I would not only do my best work as a cabin crew also I want to enjoy my work taking care of children. With Corrections: I was interested in your company because of the variety of your high quality services. I had a part time job in an English academy. I am fond of children especially that my students before have helped me a lot to enjoy my work. Asiana Company has a lot of services and I was very interested with the services offered to children. So if I will become an Asiana cabin crew, I will not only do my best in my work but I also want to enjoy taking care of children. 3. How much salary do you want to get? Well, If I said no and I would be liying. Honestly, I don't care about the salary amount. Because I really want to be a flight attendant and it is my dream so no matter how much salary I will get, I won't mind With Corrections: Well, if I will say that I want a minimum salary, then I would be lying. But honestly, I don't care that much about the salary amount. This is because I really want to be a flight attendant and it is my dream. So no matter how much salary I will get, I won't mind.  

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