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2015-05-01 · 첨삭 강사 Genie

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I don't like to tell the lies. It because lying make person's distrust. But sometimes we are faced with which need to say the lie in some circumstances. It is called White lie. For example, parents lie to their children that Santa Claus is real. It makes children happy. Another example, Doctors sometimes lie to their patients who suffering from an incurable disease about they can be completely curable. Through this lie, some of patients get well. Small amounts of white lies cause good consequences. So I think people need to tell the truth, but small white lies are necessary.

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--Teacher Genie--

 

I don\'t like to tell the lies.

>> I don\'t like to tell lies.

>> OR: I don\'t like telling lies.

It because lying make person\'s distrust.

>> It is because lying makes a person distrust you.

>> OR: It is because lying can ruin someone\'s trust. 

But sometimes we are faced with which need to say the lie in some circumstances.

>> But sometimes, we faced circumstances in which we needed to say lies.

>> OR: But sometimes, we faced situations in which we needed to say lies.

It is called White lie.
>> Those are what we call white lies.
For example, parents lie to their children that Santa Claus is real.
>> Correct

It makes children happy.

>> Correct
Another example, Doctors sometimes lie to their patients who suffering from an incurable disease about they can be completely curable.
>> Another example is this, doctors sometimes lie to their patients, who are suffering from incurable diseases, that they can be completely cured.

>> OR: Another example is that doctors sometimes lie to their patients, who are suffering from incurable diseases, that those diseases are completely curable. 

Through this lie, some of patients get well.
>> Through this lie, some of the patients get well.

Small amounts of white lies cause good consequences.

>> A small amount of white lies can cause good consequences.
>> OR: A small amount of white lies, can sometimes be the cause of having good consequences.
>> OR: A small amount of white lies can create good consequences.

So I think people need to tell the truth, but small white lies are necessary.

>> So I think people need to tell the truth, but small white lies are sometimes necessary.

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