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2015-05-04 · 첨삭 강사 Jessie

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In most countries, universities or colleges are known for giving students freedom of choice in choosing their courses. I believe such freedom should also be provided to high school students. Firstly, being able to choose which courses to take will definitely improve the quality of students' performance at school. It is quite obvious that one would be more eager to participate in a course that he or she is interested in. Secondly, it could possibly lead to successful careers. Earlier chance to find one's aptitude will give one more time to search for a job that he or she really wants to do. Then one can also spend more time improving one's skill or having work experience in the related field. Lastly, high school students are mature enough to know what one wants to do or is good at. 17 or more is not a young age; despite being a teenager, it is an appropriate age to prepare for becoming an independent adult, who can plan and experiment with his own thoughts and ideas.

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Good morning! I appreciate your effort in expressing your opinion. Your sentences and organization are really great. Keep it up Lianne. See you soon!~T. Jessie~ In most countries, universities or colleges are known for giving students freedom of choice in choosing their courses. >> Correct! I believe such freedom should also be provided to high school students. >> Correct!Firstly, being able to choose which courses to take will definitely improve the quality of students\' performance at school. >> Correct! It is quite obvious that one would be more eager to participate in a course that he or she is interested in. >> Correct!Secondly, it could possibly lead to successful careers. >> Correct! Earlier chance to find one\'s aptitude will give one more time to search for a job that he or she really wants to do. >> Correct! Then one can also spend more time improving one\'s skill or having work experience in the related field. >> Correct!Lastly, high school students are mature enough to know what one wants to do or is good at. >> Correct! 17 or more is not a young age; despite being a teenager, it is an appropriate age to prepare for becoming an independent adult, who can plan and experiment with his own thoughts and ideas. >> Seventeen or more is not a young age; despite being a teenager, it is an appropriate age to prepare for becoming an independent adult, who can plan and experiment with his own thoughts and ideas.

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