Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Hello, Teacher!
It's fine weather to go out.
I should tell my brother to have a date with her today.^^
If you could open up your own amusement park, what would it be like? What would be the highlight or the best attraction there? Get creative and pretend you have as much money as you need.
There are already good enough various amusement parks in Korea.
I want to make an unique amusement park which doesn't exist now.
My idea is to open up the amusement park where children can be a character they want to be.
Lots of staff would help them transform to a wonderful character such as being a Cinderella, the Snow White, Spider Man and so on.
I think it's fantastic idea to realize children's dream which can't attain in real.
강사 첨삭
Hi there Kaylee! Thanks for doing your homework. This is actually an awesome idea! I would love to visit that amusement park (if ever you decide to really create it ^^)! I would definitely want to be transformed into Hermione Granger from the Harry Potter movies. :) Thanks for sharing! Keep up the good work!
Ciao!
~Teacher Marie~
Hello, Teacher!
>> CORRECT!It\'s a fine weather to go out.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> It\'s a fine weather to be outside.I should tell my brother to have a date with her today.^^
>> CORRECT!There are already good enough various amusement parks in Korea.
>> There are already enough good amusement parks in Korea.
I want to make an unique amusement park which doesn\'t exist now.
>> I want to make a unique amusement park; something which still doesn\'t exist.
My idea is to open up the amusement park where children can be a character they want to be.
>> My idea is to open up an amusement park where children can become a character that they want to be.Lots of staff would help them transform to a wonderful character such as being a Cinderella, the Snow White, Spider Man and so on.
>> The staff would help them transform into wonderful characters such Cinderella, Snow White, Spider Man and so on.
I think it\'s fantastic idea to realize children\'s dream which can\'t attain in real.
>> I think it\'s a fantastic idea to help the children realize a dream that they cannot achieve in reality.
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