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2015-05-08 · 첨삭 강사 Jessie

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I think that the company should choose all. Because to support arts and to protect the environment are very important to keep life. For examples, if people live without arts, people wouldn't be happy. But It need a lot of money to support arts and to protect the environment. In the present, a company have a lot of money than people. And the money came from people. So A company should be try that will make better our would.

강사 첨삭

Thanks for doing your homework Ms. [이름]. I think it\'s really hard for you to choose between the two because you both love arts and the environment. ^_^ Anyway, I\'m glad that you still wrote your opinion. Have a blessed weekend! ~T. Jessie~ I think that the company should choose all. >> Correct! Because to support arts and to protect the environment are very important to keep life. >> Correct! For examples, if people live without arts, people wouldn\'t be happy. >> For example, if people will live without arts, people wouldn\'t be happy. But It need a lot of money to support arts and to protect the environment. >> But it needs a lot of money to support arts and to protect the environment. In the present, a company have a lot of money than people. >> At present, a company has more money than people. And the money came from people. >> Correct! So A company should be try that will make better our would. >> So a company should try to make our world better.

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