homework

2015-05-14 · 첨삭 강사 Marie

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In not less than 5 sentences, share your thoughts about this: The social part of life at a college or university is as important as the academic part. Agree or disagree. Provide reasons for your choice. The social part of life at a college or university is valuable. If it's not, video learning system is the most economical and it would be prevalent. However, most of people go to a school because they can learn other things that can not be learned from lecture, a sociality, experiences, good people and good memories. Moreover, a college or university is a stage that people should prepare for their future jobs seriously, so communicating with people in person who have the same interests with them is needed. Therefore, it'd be better fully experience not only the social part of a university or college but also the academic part.

강사 첨삭

Hello Cassandra! Thank you for doing your homework. You expressed yourself well here. Good job! I appreciate the effort. Please check my corrections below. Ciao! ~Teacher Marie~ The social part of life at a college or university is valuable. >> CORRECT! If it\'s not, video learning system is the most economical and it would be prevalent. >> If it\'s not, then a video class is the most economical and it would be prevalent. However, most of people go to a school because they can learn other things that can not be learned from lecture, a sociality, experiences, good people and good memories. >> However, most people go to a school because they can learn other things that cannot be learned in class, such as social experiences with good people and having good memories. Moreover, a college or university is a stage that people should prepare for their future jobs seriously, so communicating with people in person who have the same interests with them is needed. >> Moreover, a college or a university is a stage where people should prepare for their future jobs seriously. So communicating with other people who have the same interests, in person, is necessary.  Therefore, it\'d be better fully experience not only the social part of a university or college but also the academic part. >> Therefore, it would be better to fully experience not only the academic part of a university or college, but also the social part.

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