Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Hello, Teacher.
Today is the anniversary of the May 18 Gwangju Democratic Movement.
Many students and citizen army were killed by military regime on May 18, 1980.
Thanks to their sacrifices, we can live in and enjoy democratic society now.
In not less than 5 sentences, share your thoughts about this:
At what point in a young person's life do you think adults should stop giving advice and start helping with decision making? You may use examples from your experience if you wish. Explain your reasons.
I think that parent's advice needs until their children grow up and can earn money by himself.
Of course, We should have them train decision making before we stop giving advice.
In my case, I always emphasize sense of responsibility to my son.
I talk to my son like this : "I really love you, but I can't take responsibility for your choice. The decision is yours to take. So you should decide to do something prudently."
강사 첨삭
Hi Kaylee! Thanks for doing your homework. I\'ve heard about the May 18 Movement before. I think there was also a movie about it. Thanks for sharing!
Please review my corrections below.
Ciao!
~Teacher Marie~
Hello, Teacher.
>> CORRECT!Today is the anniversary of the May 18 Gwangju Democratic Movement.
>> CORRECT!Many students and citizen army were killed by military regime on May 18, 1980.
>> Many students and ctizens were killed by the military regime on May 18, 1980.Thanks to their sacrifices, we can live in and enjoy a democratic society now.
>> CORRECT!I think that parent\'s advice needs until their children grow up and can earn money by himself.
>> I think that a parent\'s advice is needed until a child grows up and earns money by himself.Of course, We should have them train decision making before we stop giving advice.
>> Of course, we should train them in decision making before we stop giving them advice.In my case, I always emphasize the sense of responsibility to my son.
>> CORRECT! I talk to my son like this : \"I really love you, but I can\'t take responsibility for your choice.
>> CORRECT!
The decision is yours to take.
>> CORRECT!
So you should decide to do something prudently.\"
>> So you should be prudent in making a decision.
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