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2015-06-02 · 첨삭 강사 Marie

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Hello, Teacher. It's time to register my English class again. It has already been four months to start our class. I'll do my best to improve my English skill through this class. In not less than 5 sentences, share your thoughts about this: You are given a chance to go back to a time in the past where you could change something in your life. At which point would you return and what event would you change? Before I worked in LG electronics, I had changed jobs twice within the same field. At first, [Company]. In those days, I was satisfied with my work and felt a sense of accomplishment. One day, I was offered to change my job to a small company. I adopted their offer because of high pay package. However, I found on reflection that I had been very careless. Money shouldn't be the first condition to choose a job.

강사 첨삭

Hi Kaylee! Thank you for doing your homework. Has it been four months? Wow. Time really flies. :) Thank you for always being diligent and motivated in our class. You never lost your passion for studying English and I commend you for that. Keep up the good work. Ciao! ~Teacher Marie~ Hello, Teacher. >> CORRECT!It\'s time to register for my English class again. >> CORRECT!It has already been four months to start our class. >> It has already been four months since we started our class.I\'ll do my best to improve my English skill through this class. >> CORRECT!Before I worked in LG electronics, I had changed jobs twice within the same field. >> CORRECT!At first, [Company]. >> CORRECT!In those days, I was satisfied with my work and felt a sense of accomplishment. >> Back in those days, I was satisfied with my work and I had felt a sense of accomplishment. One day, I was offered to change my job to a small company. >> One day, I was offered to change my job and move to a smaller company.I adopted their offer because of high pay package. >> I accepted their offer because of the high salary package.However, I found on reflection that I had been very careless. >> However, I found out, upon reflection, that I had been very careless about my decision.Money shouldn\'t be the first condition to choose a job. >> Money shouldn\'t be the first condition in choosing a job.  

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