Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Hello, Teacher.
I forgot to tell you that I will postpone our class tomorrow.
Tomorrow, I'm going to present my term paper in my school class.
So, I need to arrive there earlier than usual and prepare my presentation.
Let's meet on Monday.
In addition, I registered our class again soon after class.
What is your opinion on men doing 'women's jobs' such as call center agent, nurse and daycare teacher? Do you think it's appropriate? What would you tell someone who discriminates and criticizes these men?
These days, it is usual that men challenge 'women's jobs' and women attempt to do 'men's jobs'.
I think this tendency of career choices is resulted from gender equality education which we have developed.
Through this education, people got to know that biological sex differences can't determine the range of career choice.
Therefore, I think we don't need to consider this tendency to be unnatural.
On the contrary to this, dividing exactly by his/her gender is more unnatural.
강사 첨삭
Hello Kaylee! Too bad we won\'t be able to chat tomorrow. Good luck with your presentation then. Do your best! Tell me about it on Monday.
Please check my corrections below.
Ciao!
~Teacher Marie~
Hello, Teacher.
>> CORRECT! I forgot to tell you that I will postpone our class tomorrow.
>> CORRECT! Tomorrow, I\'m going to present my term paper in my class.
>> CORRECT! So, I need to arrive there earlier than usual and prepare my presentation.
>> CORRECT! Let\'s meet on Monday.
>> CORRECT! In addition, I registered our class again soon after class.
>> In addition to that, I registered for our class again right after it ended.
These days, it is usual that men challenge \'women\'s jobs\' and women attempt to do \'men\'s jobs\'.
>> CORRECT! I think this tendency of career choice is resulted from gender equality education which we have developed.
>> CORRECT! Through this education, people got to know that biological sex differences can\'t determine the range of career choice.
>> CORRECT! Therefore, I think we don\'t need to consider this tendency to be unnatural.
>> Therefore, I don\'t think we need to consider this tendency as something unusual.
On the contrary to this, dividing exactly by his/her gender is more unnatural.
>> On the contrary, discriminating based on someone\'s gender is more unusual.
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